NEW Episode of my revamped series

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NEW Episode of my revamped series

Post by Max Dollarz » Sun Apr 27, 2014 12:29 pm

Hey everyone. I posted a video on here a few years ago and decided to give my series another go. I did everything by my self except some voice overs and background music. Let me know what you all think. Thanks

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Re: NEW Episode of my revamped series

Post by lwaxana » Sun Apr 27, 2014 3:29 pm

I love it! Great story, I laughed several times. The characters were appealing. The music, voice acting, and pacing were good. Is youtube the main place you are going to show this? If so, I'd go with shorter episodes (2-3 minutes) with a hook/interesting unresolved situation at the end of each one. I think it's hard for people to watch something that long on youtube unless it's like a tutorial or something they need. Even though I really enjoyed the episode, I kept wondering how could I keep watching for 10 minutes. Looking forward to seeing more and finding out what happens next! :D
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Post by Danimal » Mon Apr 28, 2014 1:58 pm

This definitely could use some shortening. Even if you broke this into two parts so each is easier to take in one sitting it would be a great improvement and help your chances of it catching on.

The characters are well designed and the animation is well done. The story is one that anyone can relate to and the characters are introduced in a way that we know who they are right off the bat. Great job setting up the story.

The music is a bit much. There doesn't need to be constant background music and in many cases it's overpowering the dialog. The sound effects were very "cartoony" at times, which was a definite plus.

Looking forward to more!
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Re: NEW Episode of my revamped series

Post by Max Dollarz » Mon Apr 28, 2014 8:13 pm

Thank you all for responding with honest opinions. It really means a lot. I will definitely try to improve in those areas!
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Post by Little Yamori » Tue Apr 29, 2014 12:24 am

Really liked the upbeat positive vibe of the story and characters. Keep it up.

As for critiques, I think what's already been noted covers most of it. Since you really seem to have a handle on the software, one thing that stood out that I would work on was having the characters movements more sharp and less "floaty" you seem to have it about right in some scenes more than others. Must have been a lot of work. Great work on the audio (for me right now, that's a killer) so kudos to you.

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Post by ekrunk » Tue Apr 29, 2014 1:47 am

Nice! This is really great. I've struggled with the same issue with length. If it's specifically for youtube, it seems like the most effective videos are 3 to 4 minutes. But at least you have something that can be a more substantial pilot, and you really did carry it for the entire 10 minutes? Great audio for sure!

That theme song is going to be stuck in my head all week!

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Post by exile » Tue May 06, 2014 9:48 am

The story really caught me from the bus ride on. Everybody remembers being new in a school and being threatened by bullies. Intelligent use of the software so you didn't overload the song parts with too many images. The kids are authentic and win over the viewer.
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